Not bad at all, but as many of the other fliers said too much repetition in the video to keep the attention of viewers. John said it best with all the points he made, being a long time competitor and judge!
Best of all though, did (do) you have fun! Main thing is the fun aspect. As for competitive flying, you have to take things to the highest level you can if in competition. But one thing I have noticed is that many competitive fliers (NOT all) seem to end up taking it way to serious, and seem to lose the fun aspect of their flying. Which is fine if all the competitive flier is after is to place high in the rankings. But this is kite flying my friend. Soooo, try to always keep the fun it in, and do not get too serious!
Take the constructive criticisms for what it worth, and try the tips and tricks you learn from other fliers... but most of all HAVE FUN!